{"id":"cs-quarterly-sponsor-note-rewrite-concise","audience":"executives","category":"support-work","technique":"tone","track":"support","level":"intermediate","title":"Rewrite a bragging quarterly note for an executive sponsor","free":false,"task":"Rewrite the draft as a short note from Aaron to Hannah. Start with \"Hi Hannah,\" and end with \"Aaron\". Open the body with the ask in the first sentence: a 30-minute call, offering both time slots. Then give the two verified facts, one sentence each, and drop all hype words. Plain text, under 80 words.","materialLabel":"Your material (attached to your prompt automatically)","material":"DRAFT (too long and too salesy):\n\"Hi Hannah! What an AMAZING quarter for Corvale! Our game-changing platform is transforming the way your teams work. Adoption is up a staggering 18% and your teams are crushing it, and we think it's probably around 5x ROI!!! Two integrations went live, which is world-class. We would love to jump on a quick call to synergize on next steps and unlock even more value. Let me know!\"\n\nVERIFIED FACTS (from the usage report and the project plan)\n- Active users up 18% vs last quarter: verified in the usage report.\n- Two integrations (CRM and billing) went live on Oct 12 and Oct 26: verified.\n- The \"5x ROI\" is a guess; no analysis has been done.\nSlots Aaron can offer: Tue Nov 17 at 10am ET, or Thu Nov 19 at 2pm ET.","rules":[{"type":"plainText"},{"type":"maxWords","max":80}],"mistakes":[{"title":"Keeping the ROI guess","why":"The AI keeps the 5x ROI because it sounds impressive.","fix":"Say: \"Keep only the two verified numbers; no ROI.\"","checks":["r1"]},{"title":"Keeping the hype","why":"The AI softens but keeps words like amazing.","fix":"Say: \"Drop all hype words and exclamation marks.\"","checks":["r0","r1"]},{"title":"Burying the ask","why":"The AI puts the ask last, or ends with \"let me know\".","fix":"Say: \"Open with the ask: a 30-minute call, offering both slots.\"","checks":["r2"]},{"title":"Getting markdown back","why":"AI adds bold and headings by default, which show up as stray symbols where this is pasted.","fix":"Say \"plain text, no bold, no headings, no asterisks\".","checks":["plainText"]},{"title":"Trusting the AI to count words","why":"The AI runs long and cannot count its own words.","fix":"Cap each part (\"each line under 12 words\") and add \"under N words in total\".","checks":["maxWords"]}],"promptHints":[{"label":"Opening and sign-off","patterns":["hi hannah","aaron"]},{"label":"Keeps verified facts only","patterns":["verified","only the two","two numbers"]},{"label":"Bans hype","patterns":["hype","no exclam","amazing","salesy"]},{"label":"Gives one ask","patterns":["one ask","30-minute","two (time )?slots"]},{"label":"Asks for plain text","patterns":["plain","no bold","no markdown","no formatting","no headings"]},{"label":"Sets a word cap","patterns":["\\d+\\s*words","under \\d+","word"]}],"hint":"To rewrite for an executive, say which facts survive, which words die and the one thing you want back.","mission":"Get Hannah to take a 30-minute call with Aaron.","musts":["Ask in first sentence","Offer both time slots","No hype words"],"rubricLabels":["The note starts with \"Hi Hannah,\" and ends with \"Aaron\", and contains no exclamation marks","It includes the 18% active-user growth and the two integrations going live, and does not mention ROI, 5x, amazing, game-changing, world-class, synergize or unlock value","The first sentence after the greeting is the single ask for a 30-minute call offering both slots, Tue Nov 17 at 10am ET and Thu Nov 19 at 2pm ET"]}