{"id":"hr-welcome-note-rewrite-warm-voice","audience":"hr","category":"people-work","track":"people","level":"beginner","technique":"tone","title":"Rewrite a stiff welcome message in a warm, plain voice","free":false,"task":"Rewrite the welcome message in plain text, under 90 words, in a warm voice that sounds like a friendly coworker, not a form letter. First line: Welcome, Jordan! Keep every practical detail: day, time, place and who to ask for. No jargon like \"onboarding cadence\" and no exclamation marks except in the first line. Last line: See you Monday. HR reviews before sending.","materialLabel":"Draft message (attached to your prompt automatically)","material":"Dear Employee, Pursuant to your acceptance of the offer of employment, you are hereby requested to report to the Cedar Street office, 400 Cedar Street, Suite 2, on Monday, Nov 16 at 9:00 am for the commencement of your onboarding cadence. Please present two forms of identification for I-9 verification purposes. Your point of contact for arrival is Priyanka Shah at the front desk. Parking is available in the rear lot, visitors section, for the first week; a permit will be provided. Lunch will be provided on day one. Business casual attire is recommended. Should you have any questions prior to commencement, do not hesitate to contact the undersigned at 555-0148. Regards, People Operations.\n\nJordan Lee is joining as a Billing Coordinator. The team is small and friendly.","rules":[{"type":"maxWords","max":115},{"type":"plainText"}],"mistakes":[{"title":"Losing details","why":"The AI drops ID or parking to sound friendlier.","fix":"Say: \"Keep every practical detail: day, time, place, ID, parking, lunch, who to ask for.\"","checks":["r1"]},{"title":"Still stiff","why":"The AI keeps formal phrases.","fix":"Say: \"Warm, plain, like a friendly coworker. No jargon.\"","checks":["r2"]},{"title":"Excited tone","why":"The AI adds exclamation marks everywhere.","fix":"Say: \"No exclamation marks except in the first line.\"","checks":["r2"]},{"title":"Own opening and closing","why":"The AI invents a greeting.","fix":"Say: \"First line Welcome, Jordan! and last line See you Monday.\"","checks":["r0"]},{"title":"Trusting the AI to count words","why":"AI is bad at counting. Ask for a total word limit and it often lands over it.","fix":"Cap each part instead, for example: \"each line under 15 words.\"","checks":["maxWords"]},{"title":"Markdown","why":"The AI bolds words or adds headings.","fix":"Say: \"Plain text, no bold, no headings.\"","checks":["plainText"]}],"promptHints":[{"label":"Exact lines","patterns":["welcome, jordan","see you monday"]},{"label":"Warm voice","patterns":["warm","coworker","friendly"]},{"label":"Keep details","patterns":["every (practical )?detail","keep"]},{"label":"No jargon","patterns":["jargon"]},{"label":"Word cap","patterns":["under \\d+ words"]}],"hint":"Describe the voice, the exact first and last lines, and say which details to keep.","mission":"Make the welcome message sound warm and human for Jordan.","musts":["Keep day, time, place, contact","No jargon","One exclamation only"],"rubricLabels":["The first line is exactly \"Welcome, Jordan!\" and the last line is exactly \"See you Monday.\"","Keeps every practical detail: Monday Nov 16, 9:00 am, 400 Cedar Street Suite 2, Priyanka Shah at the front desk, two forms of ID, rear lot parking and lunch provided","Uses a warm, plain voice with no jargon (no 'onboarding cadence', 'pursuant', 'hereby') and no exclamation marks after the first line"]}