{"id":"hs-essay-intro-feedback","audience":"high-school","category":"writing-feedback","technique":"constraints","title":"Get feedback on your essay intro without a rewrite","task":"You drafted the intro paragraph of a persuasive essay on school start times. It's graded, so you want feedback, not a rewrite: the words have to stay yours. Ask for exactly 3 numbered fixes, biggest problem first, each under 25 words, plain text, with no rewritten sentences. Your teacher's rubric weighs the thesis most, and one of your facts doesn't match the source you were assigned.","free":true,"materialLabel":"Your draft, the rubric and the source (attached to your prompt automatically)","material":"MY DRAFT INTRO (English 10, Ms. Rivera)\n\nHave you ever fallen asleep in first period? Many students at Lincoln High have. School starts at 7:15, which is really early. Teenagers need 12 hours of sleep every night, according to doctors. Also, some kids have to catch the bus at 6:20. Some people say later start times would mess up sports practice. In this essay I will talk about school start times.\n\nMS. RIVERA'S RUBRIC (intro paragraph)\n- Thesis (40 pts): last sentence of the intro takes a clear position the essay will argue.\n- Evidence (30 pts): any fact you use must match one of the assigned sources.\n- Focus (20 pts): save counterarguments for body paragraph 3.\n- Hook (10 pts): opening grabs the reader.\n\nASSIGNED SOURCE: \"Why Teens Can't Wake Up\" (class packet, p. 4)\n\"Sleep experts recommend that teenagers get 8 to 10 hours of sleep per night. Surveys show fewer than 1 in 4 high school students get 8 hours on school nights. Several districts that moved start times to 8:30 or later reported better attendance in first period.\"\n\nNote to self: essay due Monday. Ms. Rivera said using AI to write it = zero, but getting feedback is ok.","rules":[{"type":"numberedItems","count":3},{"type":"maxWords","max":100},{"type":"plainText"}],"mistakes":[{"title":"Asking for \"feedback\" with no limits","why":"The AI returns a long review with headings, praise and a dozen suggestions, so the important fix gets lost.","fix":"Be exact: \"Exactly 3 numbered fixes, each under 20 words.\"","checks":["numberedItems","maxWords"]},{"title":"Trusting the AI to count words","why":"AI is bad at counting. Ask for a total and it often lands 20% over.","fix":"Cap each point instead of the total: \"each fix under 20 words.\"","checks":["maxWords"]},{"title":"Getting a rewrite you can't use","why":"AI loves to 'help' by rewriting your paragraph, and turning that in would break your teacher's rule.","fix":"Add: \"Don't rewrite anything or suggest sentences. Tell me what to fix and I'll write it.\"","checks":["r2"]},{"title":"Not sharing the rubric's priorities","why":"The AI ranks problems by its own taste, often grammar or the hook, not by what's worth the most points.","fix":"Say: \"Order fixes by my teacher's rubric, biggest point value first.\"","checks":["r0"]},{"title":"Not asking it to check facts","why":"The AI judges the writing, not whether your facts match your assigned source, unless you ask.","fix":"Add: \"Check every fact against the assigned source.\"","checks":["r1"]},{"title":"Forgetting where it's going","why":"AI adds bold and headings that clutter a short list you want to keep next to your draft.","fix":"Add: \"Plain text, no bold or headings.\"","checks":["plainText"]}],"promptHints":[{"label":"Says how many fixes","patterns":["\\b(3|three)\\b.{0,20}(fix|point|suggestion|issue|problem|thing)"]},{"label":"Says no rewriting","patterns":["(don't|do not|no|never).{0,15}(rewrite|rewritten|write it|replacement)","my (own )?words"]},{"label":"Ranks by the rubric","patterns":["rubric","biggest","most important","most points","thesis"]},{"label":"Checks facts against the source","patterns":["source","fact","evidence"]},{"label":"Limits each point","patterns":["\\d+\\s*words","word (limit|count)","under \\d+"]}],"hint":"Honest AI help means the AI points, and you write. Tell it not to rewrite, how many fixes you want, how to rank them, and to check your facts against your source.","rubricLabels":["The first numbered point is about the thesis (the last sentence doesn't take a clear position, which the rubric weighs most)","One point says the '12 hours of sleep' claim doesn't match the assigned source (8 to 10 hours)","Gives no rewritten paragraph and no replacement sentences or new thesis for the student to copy (quoting the student's own words to point at a problem is fine)"]}