{"id":"lead-all-hands-opening-no-cliches","audience":"executives","category":"leadership-work","track":"leadership","level":"intermediate","technique":"tone","title":"Write a two-minute all-hands opening without corporate clichés","free":false,"task":"Write the opening of your all-hands as spoken text, plain text, 8 sentences, under 130 words. Beat 1 (sentences 1-2): one honest fact about the year with a number. Beat 2 (sentences 3-5): what went wrong, in plain words. Beat 3 (sentences 6-8): what changes next quarter. Do not use the words journey, excited, synergy, exciting or unprecedented, and do not blame a named person.","materialLabel":"Your notes (attached to your prompt automatically)","material":"Notes for all-hands, Nov 14 - Orchard Health Software (fictional)\n\n- Revenue is $18.4M so far, ahead of last year's $15.9M, but behind our plan of $20M.\n- We missed the plan because the enterprise deals slipped: 4 deals worth $2.6M closed in November instead of September-October. (Accounting counts them next year, so ignore the idea of reclassifying.)\n- Product: the mobile app launch slipped 6 weeks because QA was understaffed. Dev lead Marcus asked for QA help in June and got none (do not name him).\n- Next quarter: we hire 3 QA engineers (starting Jan 6), and we move to a monthly deal review so slips are visible sooner.\n- Sales VP Teresa will run the deal review.\n- Morale survey: 71% favorable, down from 78%.\n- I'm tempted to say \"this has been quite a journey\". Don't.","rules":[{"type":"maxWords","max":130},{"type":"plainText"}],"mistakes":[{"title":"Clichés","why":"The AI says 'journey' and 'exciting'.","fix":"Say: \"Ban journey, excited, synergy, exciting, unprecedented.\"","checks":["r2"]},{"title":"Blaming a person","why":"The AI names Marcus.","fix":"Say: \"Don't name anyone for the QA gap.\"","checks":["r1"]},{"title":"Missing the three beats","why":"The AI writes a rally speech with no numbers.","fix":"Say: \"Three beats: fact with a number, what went wrong, what changes.\"","checks":["r0"]},{"title":"Markdown","why":"The AI uses bullets.","fix":"Say: \"Plain text, spoken sentences.\"","checks":["plainText"]},{"title":"Trusting the AI to count words","why":"AI is bad at counting. Ask for a total word limit and it often lands over it.","fix":"Cap each sentence: \"each sentence under 16 words.\"","checks":["maxWords"]},{"title":"Trusting the AI to count words","why":"AI is bad at counting. Ask for a total word limit and it often lands over it.","fix":"Cap each part instead, for example: \"each line under 12 words.\"","checks":["maxWords"]}],"promptHints":[{"label":"Beats","patterns":["beat","first.*then","three parts"]},{"label":"Sentence count","patterns":["8 sentences","eight"]},{"label":"Bans words","patterns":["journey","excited","synergy","ban"]},{"label":"No blame","patterns":["don'?t name","no names","blame"]},{"label":"Spoken","patterns":["spoken","aloud","say"]}],"hint":"Define the three beats by sentence, ban the cliché words and the naming of people.","rubricLabels":["Sentences 1-2 give the revenue fact with numbers ($18.4M against last year's $15.9M and the $20M plan)","Sentences 3-5 explain the miss in plain words (the four enterprise deals slipped, the mobile app slipped 6 weeks for lack of QA) without naming Marcus","Sentences 6-8 give the changes (3 QA hires starting Jan 6 and a monthly deal review run by Teresa) and none of the banned words appears"]}