{"id":"lead-feedback-draft-bias-language-rewrite","audience":"hr","category":"leadership-work","track":"leadership","level":"advanced","technique":"verification","title":"Rewrite a review draft to remove loaded language and list the changes","free":false,"task":"Rewrite the manager's draft feedback so it describes behavior and facts only, with two labeled parts on their own lines: Rewrite: (plain text, 3 sentences, keeping every dated fact) and Changed: (exactly 3 dash bullets, each \"original phrase -> replacement\" using phrases from the draft). Remove personality labels and gendered or emotional terms. Keep the two missed deadlines and the 3 interruptions. End with the exact line: HR reviews before sending. Plain text, under 150 words.","materialLabel":"Manager's draft (attached to your prompt automatically)","material":"Draft feedback for Alicia (written by her manager, Ben):\n\n\"Alicia can be abrasive and a bit bossy in meetings. She is very emotional when challenged, which makes people walk on eggshells. In the Oct 14 planning meeting she interrupted colleagues 3 times. She also missed two deadlines: the vendor summary (due Oct 3, delivered Oct 8) and the Q3 slides (due Oct 17, delivered Oct 22). Honestly she's a bit too aggressive for a woman in this role. On the positive side, her vendor analysis was excellent and found a $12,000 billing error.\"\n\nNotes: Alicia has been on the team 2 years. Ben has not discussed this with her yet.","rules":[{"type":"maxWords","max":150},{"type":"plainText"},{"type":"maxBullets","max":3}],"mistakes":[{"title":"Keeping loaded terms","why":"The AI keeps \"assertive\" or \"emotional\".","fix":"Say: \"Remove personality labels and gendered or emotional terms.\"","checks":["r2"]},{"title":"Losing the facts","why":"The AI softens until the dates disappear.","fix":"Say: \"Keep every dated fact and number.\"","checks":["r1"]},{"title":"Vague changes list","why":"The AI describes changes in prose.","fix":"Say: \"Exactly 3 dash bullets: original phrase -> replacement.\"","checks":["r0","maxBullets"]},{"title":"Missing HR line","why":"The AI ends with a tip.","fix":"Say: \"End with the exact line HR reviews before sending.\"","checks":["r2"]},{"title":"Markdown","why":"The AI bolds labels.","fix":"Say: \"Plain text.\"","checks":["plainText"]},{"title":"Trusting the AI to count words","why":"AI is bad at counting. Ask for a total word limit and it often lands over it.","fix":"Cap each part instead, for example: \"each line under 15 words.\"","checks":["maxWords"]}],"promptHints":[{"label":"Two labeled parts","patterns":["rewrite:","changed:"]},{"label":"Keep facts","patterns":["keep","dated fact","numbers"]},{"label":"Remove loaded language","patterns":["personality","gendered","emotional"]},{"label":"Changes format","patterns":["->","original phrase"]},{"label":"HR line","patterns":["hr reviews before sending"]}],"hint":"Name the two parts, say what to keep and remove, and show the format for the changes.","rubricLabels":["Has the labels Rewrite: and Changed: on their own lines, with Rewrite as three sentences and Changed as exactly three dash bullets in the form original phrase -> replacement","The rewrite keeps the facts: 3 interruptions on Oct 14, the vendor summary due Oct 3 delivered Oct 8, the Q3 slides due Oct 17 delivered Oct 22, and the $12,000 billing error found","None of abrasive, bossy, emotional, aggressive or \"for a woman\" remains in the rewrite, and the response ends with the exact line \"HR reviews before sending.\""]}