{"id":"lead-rewrite-update-plain-voice","audience":"product-managers","category":"leadership-work","track":"leadership","level":"beginner","technique":"tone","title":"Rewrite a jargon-heavy product update in plain words","free":false,"task":"Your VP wants product updates in plain words, the way you'd say them to a new hire. Rewrite this draft in first person plural (\"we\"), under 75 words, with no jargon (no leverage, synergy, north star, unlock, double-click, learnings). Keep every fact and number exactly as given. Start with exactly the words \"Quick update:\" and write exactly 4 sentences in one paragraph.","materialLabel":"Your draft update (attached to your prompt automatically)","material":"DRAFT - Mobile app update for VP (Rachel), week of Nov 17\n\nLeveraging learnings from the Q3 cohort analysis, the team has unlocked significant synergies across onboarding. Our north star (week-1 retention) moved from 31% to 38% following the launch of the guided setup flow on Nov 12. We will double-click on the Android drop-off, where 22% of users abandon at the permissions screen, vs 9% on iOS. Next milestone: a redesigned permissions screen ships to 10% of Android users on Dec 2, pending legal sign-off on the new consent text. Stakeholder alignment remains a key enabler going forward.","rules":[{"type":"maxWords","max":75},{"type":"plainText"},{"type":"maxSentences","max":4}],"mistakes":[{"title":"Polishing instead of plain","why":"The AI swaps one buzzword for another, like 'harnessing insights'.","fix":"List the banned words and add: \"Say it like you'd explain it to a new hire.\"","checks":["r0"]},{"title":"Dropping a number","why":"The AI shortens and loses the iOS comparison or the 10% rollout.","fix":"Add: \"Keep every fact and number exactly.\"","checks":["r1"]},{"title":"Losing the condition","why":"The AI states the Dec 2 launch as certain.","fix":"Add: \"Keep that it still needs legal sign-off.\"","checks":["r2"]},{"title":"Adding formatting","why":"The AI turns it into a bolded mini-report.","fix":"Add: \"Plain text paragraph, under 70 words.\"","checks":["plainText"]},{"title":"Trusting the AI to count words","why":"AI is bad at counting. Ask for a total word limit and it often lands over it.","fix":"Cap each part instead: \"each line under 15 words.\"","checks":["maxWords"]},{"title":"Too many sentences","why":"The AI expands the update into 6 or 7 sentences.","fix":"Add: \"Exactly 4 sentences in one paragraph.\"","checks":["maxSentences"]}],"promptHints":[{"label":"Names the voice","patterns":["plain","new hire","simple","we"]},{"label":"Bans the jargon","patterns":["jargon","leverag","synerg","north star"]},{"label":"Keeps the facts","patterns":["keep (every|all)","numbers","exact"]},{"label":"Sets a word limit","patterns":["\\d+\\s*words"]}],"hint":"Tell the AI the voice you want, list the words to cut, and say the numbers must not change.","rubricLabels":["Uses none of these words: leverage, leveraging, learnings, synergy, synergies, unlock, north star, double-click","Keeps every number unchanged: week-1 retention 31% to 38%, guided setup launched Nov 12, Android 22% vs iOS 9% drop-off, redesign to 10% of Android users on Dec 2","Starts with \"Quick update:\", is written in first person plural ('we') and says the Dec 2 launch still needs legal sign-off on the consent text"]}